-
"My heart can't take this pain anymore." said Alice. "I am a monster." "I've brought saddness to the people around me." She said. In a town called Erica there have been many deaths and plauges there and know one knows why. People believed it was the child Alice who had fallen from the sky. They thought it was a blessing at first and now they think its a curse. They locked her up as a child in a dungon and kept her there for many years. Now she is a fourteen year old girl, lonely, and lost. Driven by insanity. She doesnt know what to do. Now, the story begins when she is talking to herself in the dungon....
"H-Happy birthday...." she said to herself, "another year in the dungon i guess." said Alice as she sighed. The usual guard or townfolk comes up and gives Alice her dalily meal. While she ate silently the guard starts to curse at her and spits on her. "i'm use to it....",thought Alice as she continued to eat. Then as the guard left a huge explosion came from the upper level of the dungon. "What the heck was that!?", she shouted.Then all of a sudden there was a bunch of screaming coming from outside. "I-It's all my fault, I-It's all my fault", Alice kept reapeang to herself as she started to cry, "I-It's all my faul-" Then all of a sudden a huge blast came from the side of the wall in her dungon. Alice crawled to the corner of the dungon terrified and shaking. A tall man in armor came closer to her, broke the cage door that she was in. He came closer to her and said, "You're coming with me demon." Alice didn't know what to do. As he came closer she began to scream, " NOOOO" trying to throw rocks at him. But that didn't work. He picked her up and carried her out of the dungon. In shock she was finall able to see the outside world. But the outside world looked like hell to her. There were piles and piles of dead bodies, peaople with holes through their head and limbs torn out. Alice was desgusted. She saw more people in armor like him burning houses and killing families. "Why are you not killing me?", she questioned the man carring her. "Because you were captured by the terrible people, you don't deserve to die yet", he said. For some reason he didn't tell her the whole truth entierly. Then they came upon a wagon. He threw her in side and told the other men in armor to take her to Nethermain the city of Rulers. Alice was reall confused but sat still. "I-I do-don't want to die yet..", she thought to herself. As the wagon drove off she watched behind as the small town of Erica burst into flames.
- by Seasonal Wish |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
- Skip
- Title: The Fallen Child: Chaper 1
- Artist: Seasonal Wish
- Description: In a small town of Erica there lived a child who supposidly was from the heavens because the townsfolk found her falling from the sky. But many omens have been happening since she's been there. She's been hated her whole life in Erica and now she was able to escape with the help of a dark knight and wants to find her purpose in life, whats the meaning of love, and what its like to have happines. Will she be able to find those things or die of saddness...
- Date: 07/18/2008
- Tags: fantasy drama horror romance
- Report Post
- Reference Image:
Comments (7 Comments)
- STRAWB3RRii - 01/06/2009
- WOOOOW its so good i really like ur plot >.<
- Report As Spam
- xAngelxKissedx - 07/20/2008
- The fluency isn't very good, but the idea is great.
- Report As Spam
- Julia Dream - 07/19/2008
- It's incredibly choppy as far as sentence structure goes, the grammar is poor, as is the punctuation and capitalization, and when writing conversations you should put each bit of speech into its own, singular paragraph. Decent idea - with a few technical adjustments, it could be great.
- Report As Spam
- Paige Hayden - 07/18/2008
- well, itwas good overall. but i would say you should shorten your sentences and make the long ones into two shprter ones. ooverall, it was erally good though! hey, check out my story too if u want! its like this genre
- Report As Spam
- skywerwolf - 07/18/2008
- i like it. it has imagination. also good refernce pict whered you get it? i may have to steal her idea.
- Report As Spam
- kisumi_momochi - 07/18/2008
- It sorta reminds me of Naruto's past. I like it! :3
- Report As Spam