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Chapter 4: The Kings real plans
``why did you ask me to stay here, my lord?´´ said Fiona, all the bounty hunters were sent to catch someone except for her,
``i need you for something more important´´ said king Alnork, ``besides you are my most trusted assistant´´
- What do you need me to do? said Fiona worried
- I want to tell you something very important. answered the king
- what is it?
- I am an ``special´´...
- what!!! impossible!
- all the bounty hunters including you are specials too, why are you surprised?
- its just that, you have never told me that...
The King took a book from his shelve and a greyish aura surrounded his hand, slowly, he turned the book into chrome, ``i can also absorb other specials skills´´ he said after the demonstration, Fiona couldnt believe what she saw, it was true, her beloved lord was just as her...
`` I wanted to ask you a favor...´´ said the King, ``anything for you´´ Fiona answered, ``i asked the bounty hunters to capture the specials in order that i can absorb their powers, with all that power i will turn into a god!, and i will not only rule this Kingdom, but the entire world!, so i wanted you to...´´
- are you mad!! that is inconceibable!!! how can you even think about it!?
- but you said you will do anything for me!
- but i didnt think that monstrous idea will come to your mind!
Suddenly, the king paralized, that word, ``monster´´, or every form of it, had something to do with the king, it made him angry or sad, ``you dont want to colaborate huh, well i dont need you, just your gift...´´ the king grabbed Fiona by the neck and then, red energy started to get out from Fionas body and was transmitted through the King´s arm to his body, when the red energy stopped canalizing, an aura od grey energy surrounded the king´s hand, he started turning Fiona into chrome, her skin was being quickly replaced by pure silverish metal, and once all her body was turned into chrome, the king said
`` my new trophy...´´
Aproximatedly an hour later, The King had already placed Fiona in his throphy room , he has also created the ant capsules with Fionas great invention skill, those devices were big capsules with the head of an ant on the top, those capsules had the ability to absorb the power of a ``special´´ and hold it in an orb, the first person who drained the energy in the orb would have that power, he also created new ant cannons with the ability to turn into chrome everything that the energy harpoons touched, he decided to teleport the new cannons to the bounty hunters, and so he did, with Fionas ability to teleport things with red dust, as he had absorbed Fionas abilities, ``use this ones´´ said the King telepathically to all the bounty hunters, wich grabbed their new cannons while staring at their incoming targets walking slowly to their positions...
- Title: The Kingdom of the Ant: part 4
- Artist: Nick Dabe
- Description: In this chapter, The King's real plans will be told, it results, that he is a special too...
- Date: 03/06/2009
- Tags: kingdom part
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Comments (2 Comments)
- im in my feelings - 03/17/2009
- As the comment below me said,i found my self skimming almost through the whole story.And you used the words "said" too many times.What about other descriptive words like muttered,whispered,yelled,hissed and other words instead of "said:
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- Maiden of Lost Memories - 03/06/2009
- I found myself skimming, you didn't hook me and make me want to keep reading. I would advise that you revise the structure and syntax of your piece to make is flow more easily; it will help the reader forget that they're reading a story. I personally detest using 'said' after every piece of dialogue, perhaps you could change that as well.
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