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Creator of All Things
At the top of Mount Olympus, a lunar eclipse was happening. All of the elements came together at the peak and created a goddess, the creator of all things. Her name was Eclipse. She had outstanding beauty and wore a dress made of fire. The goddess had the power of all the elements.
Eclipse saw the world as plain. She then used her powers of the elements to shape the world. She created mountains, valleys, islands, and volcanoes. Also lakes, rivers, and oceans were made.
When she was finished, she marveled at its beauty. Although she had this wonderful place, she was still lonely. To solve this problem she made humans, also gods and goddesses. Everyone worshipped her as the creator of all things. Zeus, the first god she created, grew jealous. He wanted to be the one that was worshipped. He sent assassins after her. Once she heard of this news she fled Mount Olympus. She was eventually captured. They tried everything they could think of to kill her with, but none worked. After a year of failing, the assassins destroyed her. They destroyed her the way she was created, with the power of the elements. Although her body was burned, her spirit remained earthbound.
The goddess was so infuriated she released all of her power. Eclipse made terrible monstrous creatures and set them loose on top of mount Olympus. The gods and goddess couldn’t kill them but drew them down the mountain into the human realm. The creatures wiped out most of the human race. The rest of her fury was unleashed and killed the remaining humans. Eclipse created hurricanes, tsunamis, volcano eruptions, massive fires, and earthquakes.
The last thing she did was create a truly evil place deep in the bowels of the earth where no light could reach. She then commanded the elements to capture Zeus and bring him down there. Eclipse trapped Zeus in that place and tortured him. But after a thousand years he escaped. To make sure that never happened again, she made one more god. Eclipse called him Hades. He was to make sure no evil soul that entered ever left and saw daylight again. She gave him a guard dog. Cerberus, a three headed dog, guards the entrance. No soul ever escaped with Cerberus stationed at the entrance.
- by wildflower2828 |
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- | Submitted on 03/06/2009 |
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- Title: Creator of All Things
- Artist: wildflower2828
- Description: Its my short story I had to write for my mythology unit in school. I dont like it, but i want to know what i could do to improve my writing in general. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISAM NEEDED!!!!!!! KEYWORD CONSTUCTIVE! Do Not be rude or cruel. THANKS!
- Date: 03/06/2009
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- wildflower2828 - 12/18/2009
- thanks this is such and old entry ive grown in my writting since then
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- ConsultingHallMonitor - 12/17/2009
- that was preety good
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- wildflower2828 - 03/24/2009
- Yes i did.
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- Mthieu7 - 03/23/2009
- I like it did you make it up?
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- Xx_BunnyAlice_xX - 03/06/2009
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