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I felt alone no one was at home. They had left for a family reunion. I didn’t want to go because I was tired and I wasn’t really in the mood. I thought I should watch TV until I’m sleepy and then go to bed. But that was before I had a weird phone call from someone asking for help. I picked up the phone and said “Yes?” then a girls voice was yelling “help!!!” it was quite loud at first but then it began to fade away. All the noise stopped so I hanged up the phone supposing it would be just someone making prank calls, so I forgot about it right away. Then I fell asleep on the sofa while watching TV. Some knocks on my door woke me up. I asked who was it but the only thing that I heard was “please open the door” in a low tired voice. I was afraid to open, anyone would be I guess, it was eleven o clock pm and my parents wouldn’t be home until the next day. I looked through the door’s hole but I couldn’t see anything. Then the voice, which was pretty familiar, said again “I’m begging you please open the door he’s after me”. Then I thought I better open the door because this person obviously needed help, so I opened the door and I couldn’t believe my eyes. It was my best friend lying on my doorstep with her face and hands covered in blood. It was kind of stupid of me not to recognize her voice but I had just woken up. I quickly pulled her in and got some water and a towel. I asked her what had happened and she told me that she would explain later and that we immediately had to go back where she was and get her younger brother. I took care of her while she called the police and an ambulance for help. We rushed to a house, three blocks away, where no one lived for years now. She opened the door and we went down to the basement. There we found her brother tied up on a chair crying quietly, he was only five years old. My friend could barely walk so I ran to him and I tried to untie him but it was too strong. Then my friend said “Oh, no he’s coming” and I asked “who?” and she said “My uncle” and I said “Who? What?” He was coming down the stairs. I knew him he seemed like a nice and kind person. He told her:
-Where have you been? I was looking everywhere for you, you can’t run away like that I have to look after you remember?
-don’t come near me, she said.
-I won’t hurt you anymore, I promise.
-Let’s get out of here, she said – I had untied her brother – but her uncle was standing in front of the stairs we couldn’t pass him and there was no other way out. Get out of the way or else I’ll scream.
-Go on and do it, no one is going to hear you anyway, he said in an angry voice. You are not going anywhere. Her little brother began to cry he was frightened .her uncle got pissed and slapped him. Then my friend got so mad that she jumped on him and bit his ear off. He then pushed her off. I ran to help her. He tried to tie her brother again as I was helping her, she hit on a table when she fell. Then he pulled me too, and that was when we heard the police.
-You can’t get away this time my dear uncle, she said.
He tried to escape through a little window but he got stuck, her brother giggled, with tears in his eyes. The police came in and after unstucking him they arrested him and he is going through court next week. After all that they took us to the hospital. There she explained some things to me. Her parents were away on vacation and he was taking care of them but no one knew he wasn’t mentally healthy, and he did awful thing to her basically and her brother. But that night he overdid it. She couldn’t call for help before because he had them locked up in their house without a phone or anything she could get help with. But that night for some reason he moved them to that house so she got a chance. Her parents got back the next morning which was the soonest they could come. When my family heard the whole story they were shocked and said that they shouldn’t have left me alone and thank god everything turned out well.
- Title: i felt alone
- Artist: elopsch
- Description: this is a story we had to write in english class and it had to begin with the words "i felt alone"...english is not my first language soo....yea
- Date: 04/14/2009
- Tags: felt alone
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Comments (2 Comments)
- elopsch - 04/27/2009
- thank you very much ^^
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- 44hrygydi - 04/26/2009
- Wow. This was... shocking. I think you did an excellent job for someone who's first language isn't English. I did notice some of the grammar was off but I don't think I noticed any misspelled words. The story is amazing. Very good. 4/5
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