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Battle scarred and ruined
Hopes and dreams strewn across the bloody ground
I don't know who won
I don't care who lost
Here he comes
The enemy
Carrying a corpse
I know this boy
He was weak
Powerless
Too caring
Too understanding
Now he knows better
I knew that boy before he was carried by a slayer
I knew him well
Now hes dead
I have no remorse for my own corpse
I'm dead now.
- by metalheadmilo |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
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- Title: A Battle's End and the Remains
- Artist: metalheadmilo
- Description: I dunno...a poem? I know...kinda emo-ish.
- Date: 07/18/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- metalheadmilo - 07/21/2008
- thx for the advice! ^.^
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- Xx-Mystra-xX - 07/18/2008
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i enjoyed it
and ur actually good
i just would recommend u to use
more comparisons and more powerful
world to make it stand out more and make
the reader more interested ...but other then
that i really enjoyed it
good job .just keep working on it - Report As Spam
- metalheadmilo - 07/18/2008
- really? i still think im kinda suckish at poetry...
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- death_on_swift_wings901 - 07/18/2008
- well i like it
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