Satiric War for Two

• Artist: Archille
• Description: I hope that the day will come when everyone on earth will realize how foolish fighting is. I wish peace for this coming new year.
• Date: 12/15/2008
• Tags: wars nation peace fighting hope

Warring nations never stop,
Until they thought it is enough,
They will fight, never give up,
Until someone gets the last laugh.

Devastate, annihilate, eradicate!
The only way they have to make,
To fight and retaliate, how long would it take?
Oh, they must cease for goodness sake!

What future will it be for us suffering beings?
What kind of harmony the dissonance would bring?
How long will we be numb to the bloodshed’s sting?
Will we wait to take actions after it destroyed everything?

War is the genesis of total destruction,
It is the carrier of sorrow and detestation,
But don’t despair, we still have hope
For as long as there’s peace, this madness will cease.

Comments

[jgirl39]

I don't particularly like the first two stanzas - they feel a little forced (e.g. laugh and enough feel like failed rhyme). But the last two are very good! I especially lie "How long will we be numb to bloodshed's sting?" The very last line was a little confusing, though.

[Faded Dreams5]

Pretty good. The last two stanzas especially. Keep it up, you've got some talent

[Nisa the Brown Nose Clown]

I liked it alot.
I'm not into poetry on here since most seem the same but I think you really got talent.

[Strawberry Sluurpee]

cute! wink

[isabutt]

awesome:]

[ang3lKist]

Don't hold your breath. Because when you think about national leaders (and other people capible of starting wars) fight for the same reasons siblings do and it will be a while before they quit.