Falling

• Artist: onionio
• Description: This is definitely not my best work. The whole idea popped into my head one day, and I quickly jotted it down. Please comment and check out some of my other pieces.
• Date: 01/12/2009
• Tags: faling

So I’m trapped inside this bubble
Forever floating in the blue
One tiny p***k and I fall
All because of you

So I’m falling to my death
The ground growing ever so near
I resent you for your cruelty
I resent you for my fear

I’m just about to hit the earth
I’m just about to die
I’m choking on my eternal grief
Oh I wish that I could fly

Just then someone reaches out
And catches me in their arms
They saved me from a tragic doom
They saved me from all harm

Except that it was only my dream
I’m still falling to my end
And soon I will exist no more
Goodbye, goodbye my friends

Comments

[King of Trash]

I disagree with jack, I liked the ironic ending... false hope is always hilarious!!! HAAHAHAhaH 5/5...

[onionio]

Haha, yeah, I didn't exactly know how to end it. But this isn't about a relationship, though, looking back it doesn seem that way.

[NakedJack]

I have commented, is this what you wanted? My prejudges prevents me from enjoying this. Too many relationship poems. I think they are freakishly easy to write and pointless all together. The ending was weak but the start was amazingly strong. The way the rhyme didn't start right away was great. Seems like you got tired of writing at the end.