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Alone in my room
Watched at all times
Alone in my room,
Padded and white
They said I was weird
Different and destructive
No purpose in my life
What was my true objective?
They asked me questions
That puzzled me so
Taking my stuff away,
I asked, "Where am I to go?"
Smiling so sweet,
They whispered to me,
"Not to worry, little girl.
You'll soon know and see."
I've been so messed up
All of these years
What if they heard my screams
Or looked at my tears?
Giving me tests
Examining my wrists
My body is my scratching post
Extremeties damaged the most
I'm full of rage inside
They tell me I'll be alright
Their eyes hiding the truth
And a punishment so crude
"You're going somewhere
Much nicer than here.
Hurry up, they'll be coming soon.
Hurry and they'll save you, my dear."
They gave me a jacket
White with sleeves so long
But the voices had told me
That it would end so terribly wrong
It turned me insane
My arms twisted back,
I've never felt such pain
Where am I being kidnapped?
It all adds up
It's all been a ruse!
They think I'm psychotic
Because I've been abused
Alone in my room
Watched at all times
Alone in my room,
Padded and white
The jacket makes me stay
In this room, where sanity gave way
Never to see the light of day,
Alone in my room, forever locked away...
- by Communist Mule |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/11/2009 |
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- Title: "Psychotic" by Christen Pickel
- Artist: Communist Mule
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Description:
Don't you have one of those days where you feel like you'll go insane? Well in my poem, I think I capture those days pretty well lol
Oh and it doesn't have a perfect rhyme scheme but poetry isn't always about rhyming so don't say it's bad cuz it's not perfect, but constructive criticism is welcomed since I've only been writing poetry for 3 days now lolz - Date: 04/11/2009
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Communist Mule - 04/15/2009
- Well Sunafire, what did you exactly have in mind? And about the rhyme scheme, I Know it's not perfect as far as rhyming, but poetry is not just about the rhyming and I can't stress that enough to anyone who reads anyone else's poetry. And practice makes perfect, so it's not that bad for someone who's new to poetry.
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- Sunafire - 04/15/2009
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It's kinda bland...
I'm not meaning to be harsh but fix the rhyming and add a little something to the soul of the poem to make it better.
I can see you've only been writing for 3 days... - Report As Spam
- Kito Hajime - 04/14/2009
- awesome read mine sometime
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- Communist Mule - 04/11/2009
- thanks, I've kinda new to writing poetry, but my friends say it's pretty good, so I'll keep posting more on Gaia!
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- torn_between_two_worlds - 04/11/2009
- very good
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