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Take my hand,
and we’ll walk through the wondrous land laid before us.
And we’ll fall…
and keep falling…
keep floating complacently through the darkened tunnel. We have arrived in secrecy, a smile greeting us. All peculiar eyes remain twisting, with an amorphous figure hidden among the trees.
Weary of chasing time, we walk down darkened paths in silence. I step around the color and become lost. Alone, I sing to myself. The smile forms. A slash appears and I step through. I walk through the maze towards the melody, and find myself in the presence of the ignorant. Appearing once more, the smile causes chaos, and I run before they can sweep me away.
But shining, lying in the sunlight, we realize it never really began.
- by Rainbow cat FACE |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/28/2009 |
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- Title: Axel
- Artist: Rainbow cat FACE
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critiques are wanted.
and if im given a low rating, id kind of like to know why. so i can fix it next time =/ - Date: 04/28/2009
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Comments (7 Comments)
- forthelook - 09/23/2009
- The imagery is lovely. I only find the beginning awkward when I try to say it aloud, but I guess that's because this poem was never meant to be spoken to. At least, not spoken to yourself. XP
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- KatThePolarBear - 06/04/2009
- It's ok sry i didn't understand but i do like the poetry it's really cool
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- Rainbow cat FACE - 05/28/2009
- lol, i spelled organization wrong.
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- Rainbow cat FACE - 05/28/2009
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it doesnt have to do with him....
"axel" doesnt mean "Axel of Oraganiszation XIII in Kingdom Hearts."
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- KatThePolarBear - 05/27/2009
- That's nice and all but there's NOTHING about Axel in there or Organization XIII for that matter
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- DinoBrite - 05/07/2009
- That's really wonderful, i love the word choice!
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- RockLobster93 - 05/01/2009
- its beautiful- i love your descriptions!
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