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fear so frothy
my thoughts so lofty
feelings i cant take
every night i do shake
emo poetry has taken my mind
to the light i am blind
what has happened to happiness
it's been replaced with sadness
hot topic was for goths
now to be replaced with vamps
it's a shame i say
a great shame this day
twilight brought closers
on all the posers
for they are now seen
and it's time to be mean
for plastic won't work
and yes i'ma jerk
if you want it done right
then don't be slight
emo is not the way to go
and it goes to show
that your fake emotions
are fake devotions
to a crowd so fake
now you will wake
and find you are immature
for your anger was premature
thank you for your time biggrin
- by ZimJordanJ |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/02/2009 |
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- Title: emo poem
- Artist: ZimJordanJ
- Description: don't take this as a burn but more of a wake up call :D i have emo friends that i wish to save
- Date: 05/02/2009
- Tags: poem emotional
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Comments (3 Comments)
- deidara_loves_clay - 05/10/2009
- srry ive got to coment som of usdo and dont its just the way it works
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- ChibiGinie - 05/07/2009
- get ready for rapid fire constructive criticism. your poem is kind of in consistent. some times it tries too hard to rhyme sometimes it doesn't rhyme at all. As for subject matter... it is somewhat lacking. you can do so much more with it. plus: not all emos are twilight fans and not all twilight fans are emos. Overall: I liked it.
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- ZimJordanJ - 05/07/2009
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lol no comments
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