The Moon

• Artist: Yashi145
• Description:
• Date: 06/30/2009
• Tags: moon

The Moon

In the midnite breeze
A round thing big and a white-ish yellow
Surrounded by a million yellow dots
So beautiful like no other
Calms the heart and the soul
Relazes all the days stress
Rids the body of the bad feelings
Life has you know it disapears arounds you
Its just the moon,your soul, and heart
It grows bigger and bigger.....smaller and smaller then nothing
You think all hope is lost,
But its not its still there in your heart.....in your soul
The moon the stars the things you love
Is in your heart in your soul...
Your never alone...

Comments

[Iskaeil]

Spelling errors, some commas needed...
Otherwise rather good. 3//5

[cutie_forevea123]

swwet

[Echo of Faith]

There are a few spelling errors, but the sentiment is quite lovely. The red moon is a beautiful image to go with the poem. A steady 3/5, I'd say.