kill joy

• Artist: pvt_pixie
• Description: my heart is hurting and this is a vent ....so tell me what you think? i galdly take any bad comments cause i want 2 know how u really feel
• Date: 01/04/2010
• Tags: killjoy

my joy is gone
but not for long
i want to smile
but i want to cry

its not funny
but strangly odd
it seems
my emotions are just alittle off

so i'm wondering why
i loved you
when i didn't want a man
i wanted a friend

i hope this poem isn't sad
but i hope you realized
you have slowly killed my
joy

i wish you luck
but i serectly hope
she will cheat on you
as you cheated me

soo go die
and give me my joy
back cause i don't want any of you
anymore

Comments

[Kia Sai]

*nothing but detail

[Kia Sai]

Instead of writing poems, try writing about 1 - 2 paragraphs of mother but detail. Say it without just blurting out "she's gonna cheat on you like you did me" .. Instead try something like "she says she loves you, and turns around, stilling loving you, and loving him too"

[pvt_pixie]

thank you so much . i understand what you mean . i was just venting alittle 2 much on this 1

[Amvu]

Rather than seeing creativity in this piece, I see blind hatred and anger. Now if you could only channel it and explore it, and express it a little more maturely, I think something amazing could come of it. Even though it's a little rough on the edges, I'm gonna give you a 3/5 because I understand exactly how you feel.