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In honor of V-day (even though it's over) I shall repost the only real love poem I have. Like I said before, it was done for a competition on gaia that was meant to be about love and we weren't allowed to use certain words like love and roses and red and st. For a love poem, I think it's pretty good. Love is a TARP! Run! gonk** The Pheonix This phoenix burns inside my mind As the words drip from your lips Poison It burns me Sears me Scars me Kills my desire to be alone How could you do this to me? How did you do this? Destroyed my defenses Melted the ice Broke down my barricades And stole into my soul Get thee from here I beg you, stop this attack A word A smile Your breath I'm hypnotized You came so easily and caught yourself A wondrous beast How tame I became At the touch of your hand I've become ensnared Tricked into this trap How could I not fight? And yet I'm hypnotized I was wild and free A lone wolf among many But your trap was so perfect I belong to you now With a simple command you call me to you Such a good pet, I obey To your side What is this spell, this curse placed over me This magic you've spun with a simple Hello How? When? Why? The phoenix in me strives to break free But it burns for you now I breathe for you now The wild for you To be your loyal pet You've trapped me And tamed me With a simple ------------Kiss PS: Like always, theres other things to coment on.

Posted by: Rass Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 07:13am

[b:723929a83e]A First On TV

This is the twentieth century,
you are there, preparing to skin
a human being alive. Your part
will be to remain calm.[/color:723929a83e][/b:723929a83e]

-David Ignatow[/color:723929a83e][/align:723929a83e]

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Kherubim
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Commented on: Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 07:43am


	Hey, this could be a song! I really enjoyed and I thought it was very good love poem. I liked the third stanza the best. No, actually, I like it ALL. It's great! ^__^

Commented on: Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 04:34pm


	Wow, i luff this poem! Such power and depth...good job girl! heart

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Commented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 03:01pm


	<3 That was a lovely poetry. It's deep. Deeper than I've ever gotten in a poem. Great job.

Commented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 04:13pm


	Wonderful Poem biggrin What place did you get in the contest?

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Commented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 04:40pm


	Wow Rass, that's really good. It seems like an anti-love poem at the begining, but at the end it seems so sweet. appluads I really like it. How'd you do in the contest?

Commented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 05:18pm


	Whoa! That's really good, and deep! My poems all kinda go down the same route three letter etc. words that rhyme e.g. the cat sat on the mat, or some other crappy crap about an animal. Good Job! smile

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Commented on: Sat Feb 18, 2006 @ 08:53am


	cool I love it 80000000000000000000/10 heart

Commented on: Mon Feb 20, 2006 @ 02:30pm


	random person commenting insert intersting comment here

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Commented on: Wed Feb 22, 2006 @ 02:39pm


	I dont know why but reading it saddens me -- but whats better to be free -- or to be trapped with love.. ? to be free and in love? is it possibke.. hmm your poem raised questions within myself - i likeit though its very good.. i especially like The phoenix in me strives to break free But it burns for you now I breathe for you now that verse and the last one..

Commented on: Tue Mar 21, 2006 @ 04:10am


	wow.. that's so deep. I'm horrible at writing poetry..Whenever I try it comes out all crappy... and seemingly meaningless... One of my friends is REALLY god at poetry too... but not as good as you.. wow.... That poem saddened me sad And you could completely tell has lots of meaning and heart put into it!!!

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Commented on: Mon Mar 27, 2006 @ 12:13am


	AWESOME!!! Wow, that was one of the best love poems Ive ever read. Usually they're pretty sappy, but that was perfect! 10/10!

Commented on: Thu Apr 20, 2006 @ 03:43am


	srsly..you should write songs for a living!!

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Commented on: Thu May 04, 2006 @ 06:36am


	O.O I love it. It mad me a little sad though. I know the feeling of that, too. It is a really beautiful poem.

Commented on: Thu May 04, 2006 @ 07:22am


	Im not much of a talker so 3nodding

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Commented on: Thu Jun 29, 2006 @ 09:54pm


	I normally dislike love poems, because I suck at writing them, but this one was different from all the others. Most of them talk about how they "love" the person and they want to "always be" with the person. While this conveys that same message, it isn't is such out terms. It hides the meaning while displaying it for all to see. I love this one.

Commented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 12:15am


	beautiful poem, it's very...deep...

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